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Bell word: explode

Subject:

 The feeling of loneliness and sorrow

Subject:

 Have you ever felt like you so lonely, and you have a huge amount of pressure on you, giving you the feeling that you might explode?

Hook on subject:

People have that and want to die.

Hook on subject:

Other people live and don’t mind it.

Thesis:

Instead of killing yourself think about it and make you sorrow fade in happiness.

Ts:

When the thought of exploding comes to mind, I think of a car watermelon,  or a raisin in the sun.

2 echoe words used: explode, Explodes

SD:

I think things that explode should be objects.

Cm:

Not people.

Cm:

Everybody should be treated like everyone else.

SD:

In the song for a dancer, it is written for a friend that was something completely different from everyone else.

CM:

Because his friend was different he was treated differently.

CM:

After longs periods of time of being under pressure and thinking he might explode, he said to himself that he was done and he killed himself.

SD:

Sometimes when I feel stressed and under a lot of pressure I do the most simple thing I can.

Cm:

This Simple thing for me is to take a shower.

CM:

This activity clears my head of anything that might be bothering me and makes me think positive.

CS:

Next time you think you might explode or you might want to kill yourself, think about the people that have it worse and maybe take a shower.

Ts:

When Jackson Browne was put under the stress of his friend dying, his wife killing herself, and his son dying, Does it ever sound like he gave up?

2 echo words used: Dying

SD:

Jackson Browne was a very talented man with a very unfortunate life.

CM:

His wife, and close friend died.

CM:

He was very sad, but he looked passed it.

SD:

He didn’t sit there like rotten meat, or like a raisin in the sun.

Cm:

He released some of the pressure off of him by writing songs.

CM:

Some of the songs he wrote brought joy back into his life.

SD:

If anything like that ever happened to me, I would sit there like a raisin in the sun.

CM:

I wouldn’t know what to do, or where to go.

CM:

I would be lost in my own world, and in my own thoughts.

CS:

Jackson Brown is a strong man who can deal with major problems, and if I could be half the man he was I would be satisfied with life.

Hook:

Have you ever felt so lonely, maybe so lonely you might explode, like a raisin in the sun?

Bell word: lonely

Comment:

The raisin might explode, but as long as you keep your cool you will be ok.

Comment:

Instead of exploding, think of yourself in a better place being relaxed and as happy as a clam.

CS:

Instead of killing yourself, think about your troubles fade away into happiness.